JUNO was a big hit, right? Oscar for best screenplay, right? Everybody loved it, right? Well. There were several aspects that I enjoyed about it. e.g. I thought it was the best performance I’ve seen from Jennifer Garner. But Juno’s dialogue. It just tried waaay too hard to sound like a hip teenager to me. That’s why I loved this re-write. A sample.
They take the chair, then ELLEN sets up an entire living room
set in front of MICHAEL CERA’S HOME.
MICHAEL CERA
Ellen, hey. I like the couch on my front sidewalk, it’s incredibly quirky of you.
ELLEN PAGE
Yeah, well I’m pretty quirky.
MICHAEL CERA
So what are you doing here? Do you need someth-
ELLEN PAGE
Wait, hold on. Your track team is about to come running by and I need to do a voiceover narration for no particularly reason, even though I only do it like three more times in the entire movie.
ELLEN PAGE (V.O.)
Whenever I see the track team, I can’t help but picture their penises, because doing so allows me to explain that fact in a voiceover narration that I can end with the very hip term “pork swords.”
ELLEN PAGE
Alright, sorry about that. What were we talking about? Oh right, I’m pregnant and it’s yours.
MICHAEL CERA
Rather than freak the hell out like a typical high school student, I’m going to sputter around for words awkwardly and barely finish complete sentences. It’s kind of my thing.
This is Good Commitment’s entry into the YouTube Sketchies contest. The requirements were that it needed to be about a road trip and feature a musical instrument. Please help us out and leave a comment on the YouTube page here
Good Commitment made it to Round Two of the Project Breakout Comedy contest. I am now requiring you to go create an account (it’s easy) and vote your 15 votes per day for our entry, The Vulva, until August 20th. AUTOBOTS, ROLL OUT. (Decepticons can vote too.)
I’ve heard that many times from people. Some say doing drama is easier. Well I don’t really know. To that end, I’m reading my first book on comedy writing that I checked out from the library. Here’s what the author has to say about humor:
Humor is playful incongruity that contains a tension between two levels of meaning followed by a clash of sufficient complexity that surprises and delights and that leads to a resolution of that meaning.”
Kary and James decide they need to have officer elections for Good Commitment. And in these elections, the candidates make asses of themselves the good old fashioned way!
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If you see an animal and you can't tell if it's a skunk or a cat, there's a good saying to help: 'Black-and-white, stinks all right. Tabby-colored, likes a fella.'
JUNO was a big hit, right? Oscar for best screenplay, right? Everybody loved it, right? Well. There were several aspects that I enjoyed about it. e.g. I thought it was the best performance I’ve seen from Jennifer Garner. But Juno’s dialogue. It just tried waaay too hard to sound like a hip teenager to me. That’s why I loved this re-write. A sample.
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